Let me know how to improve http://barmannsbar.com.
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Please critique my 'Contact' page . Note that I only tested for two days per level, so my results may be a little too approximate in some cases.
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Readability needs to improve. The blue link on speckled blue background is low contrast. The banner is all but unreadable. This is a cool challenge for graphics artists, nobody else will bother to figure out what the text says. Artistic doesn't mean unreadable, it in fact means serving both site users and creativity.
The site is a mismash of what (to the casual surfer's eye) appear to be unrelated links. Many businesses have integrated their philosophy into the way they do business. The best to such an extent the philosophy speaks without being articulated. This site needs a unifying theme ...what's a family bar and custom glass place have to do with each other.
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You need a tag line, a short statement of benefit which identifies your unique business as something other than a glass place or bar. "Where everybody knows your name" kind of a thing. You may want a different site for each business. In this way you can create, say, a custom widget for each. What widget does a bar need?? Well, it strikes me it needs an excuse-to-go-to-the-bar widget. Why, guess what, it's Ghengis Khan's birthday -- let's celebrate! Google does this with custom styling on special days.
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Lose the yellow. It is annoying for anything other than one word directions on a traffic sign, replace it with the beige found on sub pages. HUD / VA / MLS mean something to agents, and almost nothing to anyone else. If your target surfer is a home buyer you need to rethink your navigation structure. Why bury anything useful under several layers without any information? The site strikes me as trying to avoid any idea about who would actually use it or what tasks they would use it for.
Are agent personalities driving sales? Then why not put the agents, AND their unique strengths, on the top level page? Is it something about the houses? Put that out front so it is the first thing the surfer sees. Because there are probably a dozen other sites to surf off to, find your leading strength and display it.
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